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The lead is very short, and doesn't really summarise the article as it should per MOS:LEAD. As a general rule, each paragraph of the body text normally condenses down to a sentence of the lead.
There are a few errors in using the RP template (for instance, pp. used with only a single page, or with a hyphen instead of an endash).
At the start of the Site section, we should explain briefly what's at the site, so we don't have a sentence like Its elevation and proximity to a major travel route made the tumuli conspicuous to ancient travellers coming before any mention of the tumuli in the body text.
The site's proximity to Bronze Age settlement mounds suggests that it may have been chosen to provide a symbolic link to the past: similarly, we need a sense of the site's chronology to make sense of this.
generally located off-center to deter grave robbers.: is this explanation given in the sources? Doesn't really pass the sniff test for me (after all, if you want to hide a grave, you don't stick a whacking great tumulus on top of it!)
stone crepis walls: explain and, if applicable, link crepis.
I would explain that Gordion was the capital of Phrygia.
Add the names of the excavators to the infobox. Remember that date ranges like "1854–present" take an endash.
The style remained in use after the fall of the Lydian Empire: when did this happen?
many of the datable examples at Bin Tepe having been constructed during the Persian period: similarly, when was this?
though they coexisted with others such as ... cist graves: I don't usually see cist graves cited as an elite burial style: does the source do this?
The Tumulus of Alyattes: deitalicise per MOS:ITALIC. The Turkish translation should be in a language template.
Suggest using the convert template on the metric measurements for the benefit of users used to imperial measurements.
Despite being constructed to deter grave robbers: how, exactly?
The two paragraphs of "major tumuli" have all their citations bundled at the end of the paragraph, which isn't great per WP:VERIFIABILITY and makes it very difficult for future editors to add or change content. Could each sentence be cited (only) to the sources that support it?
The Tumulus of Alyattes was described by Herodotus in his Histories: who was he and when did he write?
It's more usual to give the Herodotus citation as "1.93". We should also credit the translator (George Rawlinson) and, possibly, give the date (1920).
Alt text should be added to images for accessibility.
All other images check out.
Thank you for these comments, UndercoverClassicist! These are really helpful, not just for this article but for my Wikipedia contributions in general. Unfortunately I don't think I can commit to implementing these changes any time soon-- I had forgotten that I nominated this article until I saw your announcement on my talk page just now. So I think I will withdraw the submission for the time being, but I will eventually implement your suggestions, which once again look very useful. Botterweg14 (talk) 16:49, 23 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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